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Date Posted: 11:42:54 01/23/01 Tue
Author: Rafaél
Subject: Re: Surfing Rainbow
In reply to: SandieAngel :o) 's message, "Surfing Rainbow" on 22:38:15 01/22/01 Mon

Hi Sandie,

Good to read something a little more optimistic from you,
I hope all is well with you.

One line I have difficulty with here,

"Oh! Just me ride on its cradle when I surf!"

I have read it a number of times, it might be me
so I would be interested to see if anyone else
comments Re: this line.

Perhaps if it says exactly what you want it to,
a comma after "Oh! Just me,"
"ride upon its cradle when I surf"

and maybe upon rather than on, as the extra syllable
seems to improve the flow of this line.

I also enjoyed the read :)

and You could always say "Hey Rafael, its fine as it is,
so stick it in your ear lol"

Thanks

Rafael

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