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Date Posted: 17:08:30 11/16/00 Thu
Author: Leisa*)
Subject: Re: The Picture (Opinions Please) (tried my hand at a short story)
In reply to: Anna 's message, "The Picture (Opinions Please) (tried my hand at a short story)" on 00:22:00 11/16/00 Thu

Anna,

I've read thru this and there was only one place that came across as less sincere as the rest.
the "What a shame" part about her not growing up to live all those things - just something in that "what a shame" took away some otherwise genuine emotions at least for me.
Admittedly I am not as clear headed as I should be to critique.
Overall, I would say this is a sell-able piece to something like a Moms zine - Jounral or Redbook, Woman's Day....something of that genre.
(if that is your aim)
I used to write short stories and it is the rewriting that drives me batshit so i give up. But that is crucial to a short story - to rewrite, edit, rewrite until your fingers bleed, keep reading it over and over and the fine tuning. Honestly, I just get bored too easily with my own words so I quit. If you really wanna write short stories, take a heavy dose of patience and tolerance, mix in some durability, {maybe even a valium! j/k LOL} and stir it all up, and sit and rewrite again!
when you think it is perfect, send it in to a zine or publisher and be sure and ask for some constructive crits if they are going to reject it. Some will, some will only send back a standard REJECT SLIP and you'll never know. Can't learn anything that way! I hate those kinds of editors but realise their time is valuable too.
It's tough writing for an audience so be sure that you want to write for an audience and two, know your audience, may take some research but find out who's reading what and why?
go from there, but above all even knowing who your audience is, you have to write from your heart.

I loved the ending of this piece. I think you have that wrapped up well.
ok sorry to be rambling here.
take care,


btw, thanks so much for the card!
:)

Am feeling better today but still not all the way back yet!

Leisa*)

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