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Date Posted: 14:02:06 01/12/01 Fri
Author: Rafaél
Subject: Re: the cold and wet
In reply to: Leisa*) 's message, "the cold and wet" on 22:17:28 01/11/01 Thu

I totally enjoyed this, I find for me the line breaks in the
last five lines cause me to interupt an otherwise effortless
read, might I suggest the breaks as below, he says ducking lol

thanks I hope you are well

Rafael







the cold and wet

let the cold and wet in,
there is nothing better
to do with this day.
stay in bed, look from
my upstairs loft window.
write by hand, candle-lit.
I feel a draft of insanity;
happy smiley insanity
drip from an interior
i dare not share.

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