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Date Posted: 13:18:16 07/12/04 Mon
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: NoHost / 80.43.195.111
Subject: Re: No Longer
In reply to: Gray Squirrel 's message, "No Longer" on 22:13:29 07/11/04 Sun

I can relate to this - good use of imagery. Personally, I think it is stronger without the endline.

Raphaela

>No Longer
>
>No longer a lover,
>No longer a writer.
>
>See how the words spit
>Lifelessness.
>
>Broken line segments,
>No curves, no dancer,
>No dance.
>
>If these words were
>In an attic, they'd
>Be in a cardboard box,
>Covered with the kind
>Of dust that makes you
>Want to sneeze, but maybe
>You don't.
>
>In this same cardboard box,
>There are old receipts for
>Electric bills once paid,
>Shit like that.
>
>The attic is unfinished,
>More of a crawlspace than
>An attic, and there are
>No windows, and it's
>Hot and stuffy.
>
>Throw the damn box away,
>Who left that here?
>
>-Gray Squirrel

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