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Date Posted: 15:39:29 08/29/04 Sun
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: NoHost / 80.43.219.253
Subject: Re: Naked On the Kitchen Floor
In reply to: Ashley Owen Smith 's message, "Naked On the Kitchen Floor" on 11:56:51 08/14/04 Sat

I'm sorry to say I don't know who Beth Hart is - whether she is someone personal to you or somebody famous.

Interesting ideas. I think you could develop the ideas you have here to include some description and imagery and extend your use of language;

R

>for beth hart
>
>
>got here
>by some quantum
>leapage, leapt
>with a pool of
>dewers there
>lest i fall
>and thusly made
>it to the other
>continent--living room to kitchen,
>safely and securely
>fastened deeply
>into the warzone
>of thine head.
>how ingeniously clever
>of the tilemakers
>to checker-board
>there little pieces
>of ceramic fugue;
>and the peaches
>in the bowl
>on the table,
>glowing with
>the sun, little
>filaments of fur
>glowing copperlike;
>could be that the
>brass bowl is the womb
>and the fruit
>is that of the loom
>that wove this
>tapestry that
>tore and dropped me here
>naked on the kitchen floor.

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