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Date Posted: 12:36:25 02/26/05 Sat
Author: Raphaela
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Subject: Re: Unwavering
In reply to: Rafa�l 's message, "Unwavering" on 03:57:23 02/19/05 Sat

This has to be read outloud to appreciate the tone and slow, steady metre. The poem flows well and I particularly like the visual imagery of the first two lines - describing an African scene?

Hope all is well with you and yours.

Raphaela

>Unwavering
>
>
>Low sun set trail, long shadows east
>Wind jibes the waves;
>On gravel grinds where footsteps fall
>A-lashing waves decaying form
>Turn rising tide to rearrange them all
>
>How sand escapes, each fingertip
>Fine falling grains;
>The eye might try to count each one
>In vain alas the mind cannot
>Return to gaze reflects upon the sun
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>Now day depletes, those shadows too
>Each sound prevails;
>While view subsides in shaded hues
>As many have become so few
>Till all remains intact, my love of you
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Re: Unwavering -- Michael, 14:35:45 03/29/05 Tue

Re: Unwavering -- Rafa�l, 22:03:37 03/30/05 Wed