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Date Posted: 13:51:51 03/04/05 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: dsl-80-43-91-191.access.as9105.com / 80.43.91.191
Subject: Re: Rivers of Blood
In reply to: Rafa�l 's message, "Re: Rivers of Blood" on 10:28:18 03/04/05 Fri

Hi Rafael

Thanks for the crit, appreciate you taking the time to comment. I see where you are coming from and agree. It is hard to explain the poem as it comes from a mixture of images that have bombarded my mind and I simply wrote what I visualised. I will have a think about another stanza or may reincarnate as a new, more rounded poem. I have emailed you with my email address and look forward to seeing the pics.

Raphaela

>I like the imagery in these neat stanzas as well as
>the combinataion of reading them all together. I
>personally think another stanza which reinforces the
>underlying purpose of the piece could be useful here.
>As I have said the images are great, and would benefit
>by rewarding the reader with a slightly more tangible
>message within this piece. I guess if I were to
>verbally discuss this piece with you and then read I
>would have more understanding. It just seems that once
>I have read these excellent stanzas that I need a
>little something more to resolve and satisfy the
>appetie that develops while reading. Everything is
>good with me and mine. I have a couple of pics you
>might be interested in seeing if you can let me have
>an e address.
>
>Take care Amiga
>
>Rafael

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Replies:

Re: Rivers of Blood -- Rafa�l, 23:53:13 03/04/05 Fri
- Re: Rivers of Blood -- Raphaela, 12:23:04 03/05/05 Sat