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Date Posted: 13:00:22 05/06/05 Fri
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: dsl-80-45-173-107.access.as9105.com / 80.45.173.107
Subject: Re: Perfect
In reply to: Gray Squirrel 's message, "Perfect" on 00:02:25 04/30/05 Sat

I liked the imagery here and particularly the way it came full circle with '1000 miles out to sea on a perfect raft' echoing the imagery of the first stanza.

>Perfect
>
>I made a treehouse
>Out of driftwood,
>Then tied a rope
>For you to climb up on.
>
>You point to my tree
>And the ocean, saying...
>
>"...it's their choice,
>Not mine."
>
>So I bought a photograph of your perfect face
>With my ugliness and wept on it,
>Ruined it.
>
>You laugh when you see tears,
>Then regret it privately.
>
>I want you publicly,
>And in print.
>
>Headline News:
>God says we're wheat.
>
>I want you to shave my face, then
>Cry out when you feel
>How the skin melts.
>Oh no... you can't resist it.
>
>Like a hazard trap, I love you,
>Like a devout privilege
>Confessional,
>With nails.
>
>When you preach to the masses,
>I cower with a shiny apple in my fist,
>Pretending I know magic...
>Just to scare myself.
>
>Because I do know magic.
>
>I do.
>
>1000 miles out to sea on a perfect raft.
>
>-Gray Squirrel

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