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Date Posted: 14:38:22 07/20/02 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheM05b.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.194.15
Subject: Re: Shivers
In reply to: CJ 's message, "Shivers" on 09:31:53 07/17/02 Wed

I found this very moving CJ - one of my favourites of yours - I guess as readers we will all put our own interpretation on it. I love that first stanza.

Personally I would finish the poem at the penultimate stanza

Shivers up my spine
I get them every time
When your path crosses mine
I get shivers

At first reading I wasn't sure whether that last line was too repetitive but on subsequent readings I think it worked well.

Good stuff as always. You never cease to amaze me with your range.

Raphaela

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