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Date Posted: 13:23:24 03/23/03 Sun
Author: Mrs. G.
Subject: Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4)
In reply to: nick borszich 's message, "Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4)" on 22:27:10 03/22/03 Sat

Nice start! Your words have a very lyrical quality, and I like the line about taking a walk down your life. A couple of things I want you to give a thought to: try "thy" instead of "thou" in line 2 (that pesky Elizabethan verse, I know), and see if you can't work in the iambic pentameter a little more. You're correct in this line:

it IS my LIFE you HAVE wilLINGly SAVED

See? 5 stressed syllables. Some lines need a little more added to them to make the requisite 5 stressed syllables. Play around with it a little until you've got it, but I like your first start!

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  • Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4) -- Jordan Cogsdill (comment), 17:02:00 03/23/03 Sun
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