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Date Posted: 11:42:20 03/22/03 Sat
Author: Donia Hussain
Subject: Re: LESSON #4 (STUDENTS PLEASE READ!)
In reply to: Allison Smith 's message, "Re: LESSON #4 (STUDENTS PLEASE READ!)" on 16:17:50 03/14/03 Fri

>In the dark of night
>To gaze at the moon
>It’s likely you might
>Smell orange buds bloom
>When you know you smell
>Blossoms in the air
>To the stars do tell
>And fling troubles there
>Send them heavenward,
>Sky as their keeper
>Not to be ignored,
>You hear a whisper
>That seems oh-so near
>"They are safe up here"

It's a really good poem and you also used the pattern for rhyming correctly(ababcdcdefefgg)but you're missing one thing. I'll give you a hint, it gives a sort of da-dam,da-dum kind of beat. -Donia Hussain

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  • Re: LESSON #4 (STUDENTS PLEASE READ!) -- Niki Thurber, 14:16:55 03/23/03 Sun

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