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Date Posted: 17:12:01 06/18/07 Mon
Author: Arlete (Peer editing to Leonardo)
Subject: Re: Peer editing to Leonardo
In reply to: Arlete 's message, "Peer editing for Leonardo" on 17:04:08 06/18/07 Mon

>PRODU��O DE TEXTO
>ESSAY 4
>LEONARDO HENRIQUE DE MORAIS
>
>
>
>The Bell Jar: An autobiography?
>
>The American poet Sylvia Plath, has written only one
>novel, but ( why �but�, I can not see an opposite
>idea between the sentences )The Bell Jar, published in
>early 1963, few time before she committed suicide, has
>become one of the most important novels of the 20th
>century. Is that just a novel? No, it isn�t. There are
>some evidences that allow thinking The Bell Jar is an
>autobiographical novel, such as the following facts:
>The personality of Esther, The Bell Jar�s protagonist
>is quite close to Plath�s one, i.e., some things
>reported in the novel really happened in Plath�s life;
>Part of what was omitted in Plath�s Journals is
>present in the book; and, the book was firstly
>published by a pseudonym ( I believe that if you just
>say � There are some evidences (�) such as the
>following facts� and put the evidences into the
>paragraphs, in the body of the text, will make your
>thesis statement more interesting, more debatable ).
>According to Bennett, The Bell Jar offers an evocation
>of "the oppressive atmosphere of the 1950s and the
>soul-destroying effect this atmosphere could have on
>ambitious, high-minded young women like Plath."
>First, the main character in The Bell Jar, Esther
>Greenwood, may be seen as Plath�s alter ego since both
>of them share some pretty similar features just like
>the strong presence of suicidal thoughts, the loss of
>a father, and, both women were affected by madness.
>Before achieving her aim, killing herself( BW) gassed,
>Plath had tried to commit suicide twice, and so did
>Esther Greenwood, who reports in the book her suicidal
>attempts and her fascination for death, like Plath,
>who alluded to her first suicidal attempt in the poem
>�Daddy.� She wrote: �At twenty I tried to die;�
>Continuing, both Plath and Esther lost their father as
>a child. This fact affected Plath�s and Esther�s mind
>since the former and the latter had a very strong
>relationship with their father; and, not only Plath,
>but also Esther had to take medicines, and was
>confined for having mental problems.
>Secondly, as Robert Scholes pointed out, "The Bell Jar
>is a novel about the events of Sylvia Plath's
>twentieth year...� This is interesting since Plath
>doesn�t mention these events in her journals.
>Therefore, it is possible to conclude that the novel
>functions as an extension of the journals, presenting
>facts which were omited in them.
>Finally, The Bell Jar was in the beginning a
>pseudonymous book, that is, it was published under the
>false name of Victoria Lucas. It is as though Plath
>was afraid of exposing her intimacy with her true
>name, and opted for publishing it by a pseudonym.
>To sum up, The Bell Jar must be seen as an
>autobiography Plath and her narrator, Esther, share
>several resemblances like they were the same person.
>They have similar characteristics; besides, it is as
>if The Bell Jar was a journal to Esther in which Plath
>put her thoughts that were not present in the
>journals( You�ve mentioned it three times in you text,
>try to say it in different way). "It's quite amazing
>how I've gone around for most of my life as in the
>rarefied atmosphere under a bell jar," states Plath.
>
>
>
>Comments:
>Your essay is very good.
>I found it very well organized, the paragraphs are
>well divided and developed .
>Your thesis statement is very easy to be identified
>and all of your supports are coherent.

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