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Date Posted: 05:23:06 05/07/07 Mon
Author: Stela Spinola
Subject: Peer editing from Stela to Matheus Corrêa

Hi, Matheus,

I couldn't find any mistakes in your text concerning spelling, word order or tense, what says you have a good English and your text is well written.
Thus, the comments I have to make are most related to the content of your essay.Although the topic chosen is very interesting and the way you develop it in order to do a classification essay is according to the rules, I found some points confuse.

- In the introduction, I think you could mention why exactly you consider to be unscientific in classical cognitivism, once your reader might not have the previoustext;moreover, is agood opportunity of introducing the topic, once the text itself is , I think, very restricted to scientific methods;
- In the second paragraph you mention myths, but is not very clear to me why you consider them not to be scientific, and, besides,not to be knowledge at all. I found your position a little strong, but if you could give good arguments to make your point, it will be all right.( I myself believe that the myths are the first signal of thedevelopment of a scientific thinking in humanity, once they were introduced in greece by the pre-socratian philosofers, and thus preceeded the philosofiacal way of conceiving reality.If I am wrong, please correct me.)
_ I think you could illustrate your text with more examples related to what cognitivists say in order to refutate their arguments as well. That could be an excellent oportunity for you to explain scientific methods in relation to human cognition and why the cognitivists fail to make their points truly scientific.
Good luck and thans for attention
waiting for your comments on my text
Stela

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