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Date Posted: 05:34:04 04/17/07 Tue
Author: marcelo (corrections)
Subject: Re: Task One Group One

>UNIVERSIDADE FEDERAL DE MINAS GERAIS
>FALE – Faculdade de Letras
>Student: Martinelly Martins
>
>The thirty-two things that Egaeus loves
>
>
>The themes in which beauty, youth and death intersect
>themselves can unquestionably be found in tales of the
>American writer Edgar Allan Poe, such as The Fall of
>the House of Usher, Berenice, The Oval Portrait,
>Morella and Ligea. However, the tale we are going to
>analyze is [named](x) Berenice and the name itself suggests
>[us](X) that it deals with a woman; in this case, a
>beautiful woman died young and [who](X) was buried
>alive by mistake. But what makes Berenice peculiar and
>different from other Poe’s tales is the fact that the
>plot was based on the narrator’s obsession for a
>specific part of Berenice’s body: the teeth. We can
>believe that Berenice’s teeth reveal many things about
>the narrator Egaeus, not only his monomania but also
>he had a sexually deviant behaviour.[YOU CAN IMPROVE THIS SENTENCE]
>This sexual behaviour may be manifested through some
>points. First of all, it can be a manifestation of
>gothic inside a romantic perspective. The Gothic
>itself can be considered as a dark side of the
>Romantic Movement, since it tries to express the
>feelings and desires, a deviated nature that the
>humankind would like to hide, all the imperfection of
>behavior and attitude inherent [to us](X) . As a result,
>the gothic love expresses in a powerful way, but not
>always we could refer it as a sublime feeling, since
>gothic characters do not love in a reasonable or noble
>way; they demonstrate the individualism in their
>uncontrolled and excessive love. Then, Gothic love is
>formed by tension and conflicts, which can end up into
>terrible consequences. [Like in the end of the tale
>when the narrator reveals himself as an unsettled man
>by taking out all the Berenice’s thirty-two teeth to
>satisfy his desire; it is similar to some cases of
>murders in which the killer masturbates over a chopped
>body of his victim.] (//)
>Simultaneously to the Romantic Movement, [we](X) have the
>presence of individualism in gothic characters. For
>example, in this tale, the narration is made in first
>person and the protagonist tries to tell us about his
>desire, his mental disorder and how he is obsessed for
>Berenice’s teeth. He is constantly emphasizing his
>personal and individual feelings without taking into
>consideration Berenice’s ones. According to Lacan, the
>manifestation of passion is always an individual
>symptom, for when someone loves another person, he did
>it exclusively taking into consideration his or her
>own feelings, because loving is the desire of being
>loved, to have some recognition indeed . Then, love
>and desire are individualist feelings that will never
>fulfill themselves, because it will always be an
>individual search, there will be neither reciprocity
>nor realization.
>Another point is that romanticism emphasizes
>irrationality and the world of imagination. All the
>feeling which involves the gothic character, who is in
>love, goes through the feeling of idealization, so the
>reality is not always good and perfect and the
>romantic character ends up living in a world that does
>not exist, only in his imagination. In the tale, the
>perfection and beauty is focalized on Berenice’s
>teeth. As we can see in this excerpt, when Egaeus
>depicts how perfect they were:
>[Not a speck upon the surface – not a shade on their
>enamel –not a line in their configuration –not an
>indenture in their edges – but what that period of her
>smile had sufficed to brand in upon my memory. (POE,
>par. 15)] (QUOTATIONS????)
>
>In this case and according to Freud, [we](X) usually desire
>what [we](X) do not have and we want to be who [we](X) are not ;
>then, he was obsessed for Berenice’s teeth because he
>did not feel perfect, he had to make up for lack all
>the time. So, he loved Berenice’s teeth because it
>symbolizes the perfection and beauty that he did not
>have. As he himself told us:
>(…) I, ill of health, and buried in gloom –she, agile,
>graceful, and overflowing with energy; hers the ramble
>on the hill-side – mine the studies of the cloister. I
>living within my own heart, and addicted, body and
>soul, to the most intense and painful meditation –she,
>roaming carelessly through life, with no thought of
>the shadows in her path, or the silent flight of the
>raven-winged hours. (…) (POE, par.5)(Quotations???)
>
>Moreover, as the tale deals with a lonely man who
>[consider](Wvf) himself imperfect and unattractive. We have
>to take into consideration from a psychological point
>of view, that all his loneliness - since his boyhood -
>made him more than a misanthrope man, but a person
>with a sexually deviant behavior. Through his
>narration, we know that he had spent his boyhood
>reading books and dissipated his youth in reverie . As
>a dreamer man, he was always unable to be happy with a
>real woman, and then he tries to concentrate all his
>lack of affection in particular things of his daily
>life. It even might be the origin of his monomania
>and from a Freudian conception about dealing
>sexuality, in which he refers to the [three stages of
>sexual development: oral, anal, phallic, latency and
>genital.](THREE OR FIVE ?) According to Freud’s theories, when someone
>suffers a trauma during any of these first three
>stages it may result in fixation, which may lead the
>person to a sexual fetish. Then, Agaeus can fulfill
>himself only if he can get the object of his desire:
>Berenice’s teeth: As this excerpt show us: “…In the
>multiplied objects of the external world I had no
>thoughts but for the teeth….” And also: “…I felt that
>their possession could alone ever restore me to peace,
>in giving me back to reason”. (POE, pars.15, 15)
>Consequently, Agaeus ends up rejecting the Romantic
>heroine Berenice as a woman by trying to come true his
>desire. She had become her wife and through all over
>his life she was supposed to have been the only one.
>[But the narrator does not consider her desires,
>feelings and life.](YOU REPEAT THIS IDEA) For Agaeus, she is just a person
>[who carries the object of his fetish: the teeth. We
>can see, then, Agaeus as a gothic villain, because he
>avoided her to express her real feeling of woman and
>all his efforts were concentrated to satisfy his
>outrageous desire; for this reason, he was a selfish
>person, jealous and an individualist who kept inside a
>box Berenice’s thirty-two teeth and let her possibly
>die in a cowardly way. Berenice has never been loved
>indeed: Her husband and cousin only could love himself
>and his obsession. Therefore, Berenice was dehumanized
>as a person to accomplish the sexually deviant
>satisfaction of another person.] ( C,??,//)
>
>BIBLIOGRAPHY
>BOTTING, Fred. Gothic. Ed. Routledge, New York: 1996.
>
>FREUD, Sigmund. Fetischismus. 1927. Wikipedia. rel=nofollow target=_blank >rel=nofollow target=_blank
>href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sexual_fetish#_note-
>Freud">http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sexual_fetish#_note
>-Freud Accessed April 03, 2007.
>_______________FREUD, Sigmund. Wikipedia.
> >ious> Accessed April 04 2007
>_______________ Psychosexual development. Wikipedia,
>February 2007.
> >href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Psychosexual_develop
>ment">http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Psychosexual_develop
>ment Accessed April 03, 2007
>
>LACAN, Jacques. No Subject: Love.
> >href="http://nosubject.com/Loves">http://nosubject.com/
>Loves Accessed April 03, 2007
>
>POE, Edgar Allan. Berenice – A Tale. Ed. Southern
>Literary Messenger. March, 1835. First Printing. The
>Edgar Allan Poe Society of Baltimore. 12 April 1998.
> >href="http://www.eapoe.org/works/tales/bernicea.htm.">h
>ttp://www.eapoe.org/works/tales/bernicea.htm.
>Accessed April 03, 2007.
>
>
Dear Martinelly here some observations from your text, sorry my mistakes:

a)I can not indentify clearly your Thesis Statement;
b)In your introduction, you did not concetrate in only one idea and it was narrow enough.
c)The subject that you choose is very interesting and debatable, but also so difficult to development.
d)The conclusion doesn't restate to the thesis statement, because the thesis is not clear.
e)The reader needs to know related BERENICE, if you are talking to the book or to the character.
d)As Adriana said in the class, we need to avoid the using of "we" and "I" in academic writing.
e)The introduction can be more simple, for me, in your text, it has the same inportance of the development and does not introduce an idea clearly.

Kisses, Marcelo

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