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Date Posted: 19:02:18 04/22/07 Sun
Author: Thais
Subject: Task One - Peer editing to Antonio

It is a very quick view of an extremely interesting and intriguing subject. The paragraphs’ division got a little confusing at the beginning. As I see it, I would put the first two paragraphs together – since they discuss more broadly and arguably the subject presented – and would find a way to incorporate that isolated direct quotation into the body of the text. The rest of the paragraphs, except for the concluding one, are all about examples – maybe because of that they could also be glued to each other, giving room for a more ‘theoretically explanatory’ paragraph in between. Anyway, overall it is a very good piece of writing - very well-written and amazingly ‘catchy’.

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