Date Posted:06:05:36 08/12/07 Sun Author: Michael Subject: Re: War Story In reply to:
Toy tiger
's message, "Re: War Story" on 16:37:52 08/11/07 Sat
>>>>>>Frank and Joe raised their heads above the slit
>>>>trench
>>>>>>they had dug the previous night, and surveyed the
>>>>>>bleak landscape ahead. "I don't like this, Joe,"
>>>>>>whispered Frank, "It's quiet, too quiet."
>>>>>
>>>>>Interesting, but as short stories go, its very
>>short.
>>>>
>>>>Good plot though. But I think you need to work a bit
>>>>more on the characterization. Whoops... I think my
>>>>critique is longer than your story!
>>>
>>>
>>>It was an allegory.
>>
>>Then you should have said it was a War allegory. You
>>cant blame us.
>
>
>You were supposed to figure that out immediately. I
>know Jones did. As a nawthor I can't do all your work
>for you.
Jonesy...teacher's pet! I think people shouldnt be allowed to post allegories without warnings.....and so it begins.
