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Date Posted: 06:36:17 09/15/99 Wed
Author: DiAnne ;)
Subject: Max made his way over to the elevators, (Plus, a 'slight' change in an earlier scene...)

(Just a note: There is a section where Jack and Max are at the pizza parlor that should be changed to the following, for continuity and to make a bit more sense. Sally and I were talking and we wondered just 'how' they could have ID'd Josie from the photo alone, considering she was wearing a wig. Hope you don't get too confused...! ;)

Leading up to the changed scene......
"You know Jack, this picture of this lady here looks real familiar to me. I just can't put my finger on it." Max said as he showed Jack the picture of the woman standing with a smile on her face.

The slightly changed scene......
"Huh, I don't know about this girl, Max, but I did find out something interesting from the employee records of the pizza parlor. A girl named...Josie Stratton. She's been living on her own. Her parents and a brother were killed in an explosion at an eatery that was owned by the same family that owned the pizza parlor. Her younger brother has been in a coma over at UCLA for the last year," Jack said as he took another large bit out of his hamburger.

Okay, NOW the new addition..............
...waiting impatiently for a ride up to ICU. He'd couldn't get this girl out of his mind. He wondered if the picture of that blonde girl that he'd taken at the scene bore any resemblance to this Josie. If he could just get a chance to talk to her, to see her, he knew he could put this niggling doubt he had to rest.

The elevator dinged, announcing it's presence, and Max stepped inside. A second later, the next elevator came to a stop, and Josie stepped out.

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