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Date Posted: 02:47:45 05/02/04 Sun
I've been reading alot of your posts, and most of them are of pretty poor quality. Not to offend anyone, I'm just trying to help.
You need to be alot more descriptive. What does your character feel, see, hear, smell? What is going on around your character? What does the landscape look like? What are your characters emotions? What is your character doing?
Don't just say something like 'He walked around the territory, looking for someone to talk to',
You could be alot more descriptive and say something like, 'The small, compact stallion, dark-bay in colouring, strode forth, his quick stride eating up the earth. His hard, neat hooves swept through lushious grass, a gentle breeze lifted his long, black mane from his hot neck. Dark eyes scanned the territory, searching for a friendly equine to talk too. The land around him was quiet, only the distant trill of a bird broke the silence. Strong sunlight shone through the trees, the fiery ball high in the sky. He drew a deep breath, fresh air filling his lungs, expanding his chest as a feeling of happiness swelled within him. He was new here, and looking for a friendly horse to converse with.'
It's not the best example, but good enough. Also, don't go mating with horses you barely know! Play the game, get to know the traits of the other characters. Find a mate 'worthy' of you. It makes the game alot more fun.
When you post, use proper punctuation and spelling. Run it through Microsoft Word before sending it. It makes your posts look alot more professional, and sets the mood for the game.
Anyway, by trying this you'll probably find the game is alot more enjoyable for everyone.
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