I especially like this part: -- GUILD GOLDENSWORD

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Subject: I especially like this part:

Author:
Larq

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Date Posted: 07:26:51 01/20/02 Sun
In reply to: Six Angry Mobsters 's message, "When your eyes fall on ashes." on 13:12:23 01/17/02 Thu

"Slowy
the world opens to you
revealing secrets cast in silver."

:)

I like the imagery here. I envision a treasure chest in one sense, and am reminded of the addage "every cloud has a silver lining." It also reminds me that I should not assume anything in life because silver-lined secrets will surprise me as I let the world reveal itself.

Is this a call to take things as they come rather than to jump the gun on things?

The passage is very smooth, very thought-provoking. The line breaks, coupled with the alliteration with the Ss and the consonance with the Ss, Ls, and Rs, cause the reader to read that slowly. I found myself digesting it one word at a time while, at the same time, each syllable sticks on the tongue.

In fact, I like the use of the letter S throughout the poem. It slows down the rhythm so that the reader is obliged to read slowly and carefully, just in case there are any "secrets cast in silver" in the lines.

Six, it's beautiful.

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Thanks.	Six Angry Mobsters	05:16:50 01/21/02 Mon