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Date Posted: 11:59:44 12/11/02 Wed
Author: Albastor
Subject: ..The Results..

Skull lowered as sinew 'pon nimble pedates rippled along elongated limbs. Lithe appendages swung 'neath firm torso as the arid desert grounds sprayed upwards. Plumage flitted, virile thundering towards the fatal duo. Luminous oculars widened as pate yielded to the azure heavens. The call that was summoned from innards filled the empty plain....

The attacks and defenses:

1a)Odyssey: Buck to opponents hip joint
1d)Ghostly Illusion: Hastily moves out of the way

2a)Ghostly Illusion: Bite on rump
2d)Odyssey: Stricken, blood trickles down hinds from cut

3a)Ghostly Illusion: Bite some where on crania
3d)Odyssey: Head curls into chest and crania is moved away

4a)Odyssey: Full rear, coming down on foe's haunches
4d)Ghostly Illusion:(hazy, but) Blood from small wound

5a)Odyssey: Buck towards foes barrel
5d)G.I: Backs out of the way but is caught on ear tip

6a)Odyssey: Bared ivories, clamps on jugular
6d)G.I: Attempts to move but hurts more (kicks out)

7a)G.I: Kicks out
7d)Odyssey: Cut on cheek

10a)Odyssey: Rakes chest with daggers
10d)G.I: Receives the blow

9a)G.I: Kicks out
9d)Odyssey: Nearly misses the hit

10a)Odyssey: Uses teeth to hammer foes skull
10d)G.I: Misses deadly blow

The Results:

Ghostly Illusion:

You had a good attempt, but needed to be more specific on how you retaliated, and what happened to you. For example, how you moved out of the way when you were attacked, and if you were hit you need to explain what the injury was like in more detail. This is a good try for the first time fighting, but I would like you to come back and do another battle before I judge you. Here are some tips: use lots of adjectives constantly! Be descriptive all the time and use an adjective practically before every noun! Check out the Dictionary and expand your vocabulary; it is great when you hardly ever use the same word twice in a post. Ex. Instead of daggers you can use: predates, nadra, nails, slates, obsidians, kelsons, plates, discs, flints, or titaniums! Also try to use different attacks all the time, not repeating one. I will post above this with the vital attacking areas to help you out. Lastly, make sure your dodges are realistic, and be very specific with them. For example, if the foe attempts to buck out towards your barrel, you can say something like this...Orbs widened as instincts took over; obsidian flints rised towards the heavens, beast balancing 'pon quaking haunches 'fore weight shifted violently to the left. Bodice twisted away as silver virile came down with force, lethal fores meeting the cracked desert terra in a downward stroke, nearly missing the opponents thrust that arrived closely by his side.... If the attack hits you... Brujo was frozen with fear as the blow came quickly, allowing no time to dodge it. The silver beast stumbled sideways as a shrill cry of pain t'was released from ajar palate. Ribs ached as the Hessian attempted to regain his air supply, each gasp sending a pain throughout sinuous torso. The adversary's blow did not penetrate the skin, but a deep and painful bruise remained in the stricken area... Don't be afraid to try new things! And please come back soon :)

Odyssey:

You did very well! Your attacks and dodges were specific and your language was beautiful! You did very well being realistic, but don't forget, not everything penetrates the skin because horses teeth and nadra are usually slightly worn down in the wild and leave achy bruises on the areas which have thicker skin (they hurt! horse bites can be painful! Your preparation for attacks was very nice and I love the planning that you did (for example coming at an angle) please feel free to use more of these kinds of tactics! Also, even more preparation is good, such as circling and planning your attack before moving in. Lastly, don't forget to have lots of variety in your use of words because it is impressive when you don't use one more then twice in a post, that is, if you can avoid it. You have received a 9! You earned a star! Good job!

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[.thanks.] -- *Odyssey, 22:05:06 12/11/02 Wed