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Date Posted: 05:48:10 07/03/02 Wed
Author: Marie
Subject: Re: Buffy the Vampire Slayer: Episodes 01 - 05
In reply to: :o) 's message, "Buffy the Vampire Slayer: Episodes 01 - 05" on 02:09:17 04/14/02 Sun

I just read "Stone Cold," and really enjoyed it. I liked that you focused on character interactions--that's what is most compelling about BtVS, not the monster of the week. And those interactions were very true to the characters. I could completely visualize Buffy, Willow, etc. as I read. I also liked how Anya's necklace was ripped off, thus putting her in danger. It added extra tension to the scene.

My criticisms are minor:
1) I found the song lyrics to be distracting. The lyrics interrupted the flow of the dialogue. I would suggest either writing all the lyrics as the song is introduced, writing them only for non-dialogue scenes, or not writing the lyrics at all.

2) Grammar. It's = it is. Its = possessive. As in, "the vampire clutched its chest." For all other words, 's = possessive, regular s = plural. Incorrect usage is distracting and sometimes confusing. And wouldn't you prefer the reader to focus her full attention on the wonderful story? :)

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Re: Buffy the Vampire Slayer: Episodes 01 - 05 -- willowfan, 17:17:31 07/03/02 Wed
- *kicks self* I shoulda caught that!!! -- Noggins (executive producer & editor on this ep), 16:52:09 07/08/02 Mon
  - Buffy/Xander -- AnnieM, 21:17:13 07/16/02 Tue
    - Re: Buffy/Xander -- willowfan, 16:55:17 07/18/02 Thu
      - *grins* -- Noggins, 20:11:49 07/19/02 Fri
        Re: *grins* -- Penance, 20:10:17 07/31/02 Wed
        That'd make things too easy :) -- Noggins, 13:33:03 08/04/02 Sun
Responses -- Noggins (executive producer & editor on this ep), 16:45:14 07/08/02 Mon
- Re: Responses -- Malora (aka "Marie" from above), 17:37:40 07/18/02 Thu
  - Re: Responses -- Noggins, 20:08:06 07/19/02 Fri
    - Re: Responses -- willowfan, 01:50:24 07/20/02 Sat
      - Re: Responses -- Noggins, 13:41:31 08/04/02 Sun