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Subject: ` Critique? Why, sure. `

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Hilary

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Date Posted: 06:23:34 07/21/02 Sun
In reply to: Pandora 's message, "i'm an idiot... haha" on 07:52:32 07/16/02 Tue

Well, there's not a whole lot to critisize - you seem to have an excellent handle on the English language, and your post read fluidly and without a hitch. A few nitpicky things I noticed, though.

'Shredding upon the unsuspecting earth' - I'd take out the upon, but that's just me.

'Mahogan' - that should probably be mahogany.

'Venemous' - Spelling error, change to venomous.

Also, you've got a couple of commas missing, but nothing too earth-shattering. All in all, I'd give this example an 'A.' Oh, and Pandora's picture rocks. I know, it's not part of the writing, but..yeah. *Shifty eyes*

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Subject	Author	Date
Oh, god. I'm such a dork. Lookit the lack of asterisks by the Subject and Name fields. Smacks self (NT)	Hilary	06:24:56 07/21/02 Sun
Thanks! -- Pandora, 18:36:27 07/23/02 Tue