| Subject: *Nods his elegant head in return and bows gracefully.* |
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The Sunchaser
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Date Posted: 09:46:57 06/11/02 Tue
In reply to:
Numinor
's message, "Bronze one..." on 18:40:58 06/06/02 Thu
*His eyes like dark pools shine brightly and happily as he gazes upon the ones he loves. His coat gleams with the light of a bronze sun, brighter and more brilliant then all around it. His mane and tail fall like bronze rivers, his tail to the ground, his mane to his broad shoulder. He arches his magnificent neck and whinnies, loud and proud, the muscles standing out under his satiny neck-pelt. He rears, forelegs that are tightly bound with sinew pawing the air, diamond-hard, solid bronze hooves glittering. His long golden horn (or alicorn, as the most knowing ones call it) sparkles and is so bright that none can look at it while it is under bright sun and at the right angle, for it will blind them. He whinnies a second time, standing in a pool of bronze starlight, handsome head raised proudly, nostrils flared as he catches the scent of adventure from the land below them...*
(OOC: Hey, it would be cool if you--the owner, that is--would make a Balinor, too. You could put the link on the Celestial Valley page. Also, I have a few other suggestions: 1) The color scheme of the Joining Valley page gives me a headache! (LOL just joking!) I think red doesn't really work for the background--it always reminds me of the Valley Of Fear--you know, red = fire? 2) To make the pages look more official and well, just plain nice and pleasing to the eye, I think you should put one or two spaces between every scentence, even when Numinor or Atalanta are talking. Also, begin and end each scentence of talking with a ". For instance, this is two scentences before you neaten them up: he smiles at you. welcome, my name is Numinor, the golden one, and Atalanta, the dreamspeaker, is my mate. And after you neaten them up, it should look like this: He smiles at you. "Welcome, my name is Numinor, the Golden One, and Atalanta, the Dreamspeaker, is my mate." You get it? Of course, you don't have to take ANY of my advice, at ALL! But if you ever need some help, just post a message for me! K, thanx for your time! CYA!
~*~*~ The Sunchaser ~*~*~
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