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Date Posted: 07:02:47 09/26/00 Tue
Author: VAS
Subject: Re: Salted Tears
In reply to: Johnny 's message, "Salted Tears" on 06:49:23 09/25/00 Mon

I really liked this one, Johnny. Especially 'patched with salted tears.' However, IMHO, the weakest stanza is the last, which is a sad way to leave your piece. Yet I don't have any good suggestions. I'm only saying this, because the piece is so good and if you can puzzle out a stronger ending, it is worth any struggle. I think, anyway.


> Hidden, I'm safe
> From my fear
> A mind's state
> Year by year

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