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Date Posted: 03:01:15 11/18/01 Sun
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB11a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.173
Subject: Re: The Unknown Soldier
In reply to: Highlander 's message, "The Unknown Soldier" on 10:56:15 04/12/05 Tue

A very moving tribute Highlander, and it is refreshing to see a poem about 11 November, which remembers all the victims of such wars, soldiers and civilians. We should never forget them or we will continue to make the same mistakes. I was pleased to see so many children wearing their poppies with pride (despite the talk last year to stop them!) - and it prompted so many to ask 'why?'

The tone to this poem is very reflective, making the reader think about those words you have penned - they become so much more meaningful when you engage your reader's own intellect, and you have achieved this well and expressed the sense of loneliness and isolation.

Not sure about the word 'emptyless' - perhaps just 'empty' or 'like a vacuum'.

Great stuff my friend and good to see you round these parts again.

Raphaela
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>This is a mere fragment of a dedication~in so short
>words I would like to remember the veterans of war.
>
>
>My country that I served
>she did employ me
>
>My unit that I ranked
>it did deploy me
>
>The enemy that was sent to greet me in the trenches
>was sent to destroy me
>
>But I did not fall into the arms of evil
>
>
>The more dark blue uniforms I slaughtered
>made me feel a lesser man
>
>The more I aimed my weapon and hit my human target
>the further away from home I felt that I didn�t belong
>in
>
>But I did not fall into the arms of evil
>
>
>my shell for a corpse lies emptyless inside a polished
>coffin
>my nations proud flag drapes neatly creased and folded
>and under the white cross, poppy flowers swaying to
>the tune of bugles and bagpipes
>
>lies the Unknown Soldier
>
>11th November
>Poppy day

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Re: The Unknown Soldier -- AGS, 13:03:37 11/19/01 Mon

Re: The Unknown Soldier -- Raphaela, 14:35:54 11/19/01 Mon