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Date Posted: 13:27:03 03/23/03 Sun
Author: Mrs. G.
Subject: Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4)
In reply to: DEENIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 's message, "Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4)" on 00:12:20 03/23/03 Sun

Ooh! Nice extended metaphor here--a little spooky, too! If Shakespeare went goth, it would be a little like this. ;-) Your word choice is nice--I want you to play around with your iambic pentameter now. Look at this line:

and NOW i WISH our LOVE was NEver TRUE

Perfect. All 5 syllables. But it gets awkward on this one:

i TRUly DEspise YOUR breathTAking IMage

5 syllables, but not exactly the way it is in normal pronounciation. Can you play around with the words a little until it works? Nicely done!

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  • Re: Becoming Shakespeare: Write Your Own Sonnet (LESSON 4) -- Ashley Delvecchio, 17:38:43 03/23/03 Sun
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