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Subject: Such an exquisite use of language (r)


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Date Posted: 01:25:01 08/04/01 Sat
In reply to: delle 's message, "Relishing the Burn (4/6) [for Debbie Biv and Catsma]" on 20:12:56 08/03/01 Fri

I particularly like the chapter openers - they are a short, sharp knife to the emotions. The one for the third chapter surprised me a little - it implied what followed would be from Michael's POV. Nonetheless, the switching from the inner room to outer and back again is very effective in this story.

You've tightened these from the first posting and, consequently, made them far more intense. It's a story which requires tight, disciplined writing in order to be effective and you'd have to be one of the best writers of this style in the fandom.

I'm looking forward to the last two chapters with a great deal of anticipation.

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