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Date Posted: 09:47:22 05/23/08 Fri GMT-5
Author: Lori
Author Host/IP: S0106001a70540c2c.cg.shawcable.net / 68.145.251.17
Subject: Re: And in the end it was easy! Good
In reply to: DianeG 's message, "Re: And in the end it was easy! Good" on 20:42:59 05/22/08 Thu GMT-5

Congratulations, Liz. Hope the rest of the revising sails.

Lori

>Glad you found the right way to handle it. Sometimes
>just mumbling about things while in good company
>helps. (I only found this thread after you solved your
>question.)
>
>Diane
>
>Who knew? All I had to do was substitute I for she
>>and voila! The sentences were dialogue in disguise!
>>Life should be simple!
>>Liz
>>
>>>I think (reluctantly) that our editor fingers are
>>>hitting a soft spot in my story. If, as in your
>>>example, the summarized dialogue was of little
>>>importance (and short)it could be presented as is.
>>>However it really is of most importance to the story
>>>line. Perhaps the writer (a distant past self) was
>>>veering off from writing the drama. Sigh. Thanks
>for
>>>your discussion.
>>>Onward Liz
>>>
>>>Well, your example would work, if you really needed
>to
>>>>say it, Lori, but I think Liz would be better off to
>>>>stay in direct quotes in the situation she is
>>>>describing. Instead of
>>>>'Then she tells me something that I would never have
>>>>thought of, how suddenly she finds herself under a
>>>>miscroscope,' why not:
>>>>
>>>>"I feel like I'm suddenly under a microscope."
>>>>
>>>>"Why is that, Jean?"
>>>>
>>>>which conveys the surprise of the narrator, and
>>>>advances the conversation.

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