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Date Posted: 14:41:42 03/24/01 Sat
Author: si
Subject: aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaargh.

well since this bloody forum appears determined not to let me answer your message, faye, here is what i had to say...:

welcome aboard, faye - good to see you posting. i like the beginning of this a lot, particularly the 'white smothering over the pale blue' - mood created through detail. the trees clinging is good, too. i'm not sure why the train should be travelling up the road, though? also, instead of the two ANDs, why not have a semi-colon followed by 'I much prefer...'? and just 'High walls...' - cut the definite article. not sure about capacity, either, but the last line is a cracker... is llafranc in cornwall? it sounds more breton...

i've now written that bloody passage out so many times i more or less know it by heart. stupid bloody internet.

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[> ah! -- faye, 16:33:03 03/24/01 Sat

Llafranc is in Spain, and for james..it is pronounced "Ya frank"..and isn't an angry piece!

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[> [> so their pronunciation is dodgy - obviousy a celtic word. would that be northern spain? incidentally, for general convenience, when you are answering posts, put your answer in the box marked 'message subject', so that we can all see it without having to click on it... -- si, 19:03:50 03/24/01 Sat

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