kind of pointless, aimless and unimpressive but nothing else will be coming out of me anytime soon.... -- Some Let Me Make You

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Date Posted: 17:57:10 03/13/01 Tue
Author: zeina
Subject: kind of pointless, aimless and unimpressive but nothing else will be coming out of me anytime soon....

"There is something beautiful about the way people look when they concentrate"
"Do you think so? I don't. I think they look damn ugly."
"Its beautiful the way they are in their most natural state, really. Their eyes look so lovely."
"Nope, they just pull silly faces."
"I think its beautiful. Do you always disagree or is it just with me?"
"You, darling. I like watching you try to justify things."

She screwed up her face so that the skin around her eyes wrinkled over and her lips stuck out.

"See, look how silly you look."
"But I wasn't trying to concentrate!"
"Then what were you trying to do?"

She took a moment to think about this. Her voice became softer and lower.

"I was just pulling a face."
"I know. And you looked beautiful doing so."

She bit the inside of her lower lip. He tried not to smile.

"I hate you."
"You know you look really beautiful when you concentrate like that..."
"I hate you."
"In fact, It makes me want to get my camera out when you do that!"
"Shut up."
"Do you really want me to?"
"Yes."

He didn't say another word. She leant back on her chair and crossed her legs and arms and continued to bite the inside of her lower lip, hard this time. He leaned forward and rested his elbows on her knee, leaning into her, resting his chin on two palms faced upwards to support his face. He crossed his eyes at her.

"Go away."

He opened his eyes wide and brought the corners of his mouth down to his chin and made a whimpering noise. She bit the inner of her lip harder, trying not to smile.

"What do you want?"

He motioned to his mouth and made noises behind closed lips.

"What the hell is your problem?"
"You told me to shut up."
"Oh."
"So I can talk now?"
"Yes."
"Can I tell you that you look beautiful again?"
"If you must"
"You look beautiful."

She smiled.

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[> and this is the piece you were being shy about posting? moron. okay, no narrative, really, but evocative and closely described; good characterisation, good details. i enjoyed it. -- si, 19:00:43 03/13/01 Tue

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[> you have really captured the moment and explained the situation well i could imagine the whole thing perfectly but i think you used the word lips too many times -- M. Griffith, 10:37:21 03/16/01 Fri

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[> Good scene. Some of thisworks well such as the progression of dialogue and its a very realistic conversation. There are a few bits that makes it impossible for me to take this seriously. I just cant imagineanyone saying "and you looked beautiful doing so" and the 'darling' at thebeginning, its a bit too Cat and Freddy and I just cant help but imagine it in a cockney accent. These things probably dont bother anyone else but my mind wanders you see. Maybe im just braindead and emotionally stunted. -- james, 17:54:38 03/19/01 Mon

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[> [> wel i've never used braindead before and stunted.... hmmmm.... now that i think of it its a good one to use :P just teasing ya jamoose -- zeina, 13:55:42 03/20/01 Tue

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[> [> She doesn't think of you as braindead & emotionally stunted anymore, it was just that harbour piece that she hated. I'm surprised you remember that. -- luke, 16:56:36 03/20/01 Tue

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