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Date Posted: 16:13:07 05/29/07 Tue
Author: Lindiane
Subject: Peer Editing to Issenguel

My essay

Babies also communicate

The word “ communication” means exchange of information between beings. Communication allows beings to exchange feelings, thoughts and information in several ways. It is possible in different ways such as speech, writing, bodily gesture, touch, eye contact, cry and shout. However, the interesting fact of communication is that it is not uniform, bebies (WW) also can communicate with the people around.

When babies are born, they do not arrive to the world speaking because of their yet unfinished mental development. Even so, babies are able to communicate or express what they feel. Their communication is most noticeable in two ways: crying and laughing. The volume of a baby's cry can vary from a murmur to a shout of 84 decibels. The reasons of babies (??)cry also may vary and time is what parents need to identify them.

There are however three main types of crying. The first one is Ruse Cry: it is the baby's most vital weapon to achieve its will. Normally, this appears in the moments of obstinacy, when the baby feels jealousy or prohibited of doing something. The second is Sorrow Cry. When the baby cries in absence of its toy. It is afraid of being alone or in awkward situations. And the third is Pain Cry. When the baby is not only hurt, but feels cold or hungry too. These three different manifestations of a baby happen when normally something goes wrong (??).

Another interesting way that a baby communicates is through smiling. A baby smiles to show happiness about something. There are three different way (V) of smile for a child. The first way is the Closed Smile. It is that embarrassed smile, when a child usually feels ashamed being criticized or praised. The second is called Superior Smile. It is the social smile, when the child just wants to be pleasant. It is used when somebody tells it a story. So, the third one, is called Wide Smile. It is the maximum demonstration of happiness and amusement. It is the expressive laughter. The child laughs when it is having fun or after a game.

These two important ways of babies’ communication are developed right on the first year of birth. As long as the time pass this communication become as a strong instrument them before they start speaking words. Only a year later they start speaking little words. To conclude, humans need a way of communication to survive. It should be impossible to survive if babies were not able to communicate by crying and laughing. Communication is what permits a steady relation between ((Ww) people. Humans are parts of the same environment and they are interdependent.

Dear Issenguel,

Your text is quite interesting. However, there are some words that are wrong. Another thing is that you have used so many “ways”. Try to use synonyms of the word ways instead of repeating it all long your text. The last sentence of your text should be revised or rewritten. Summing up, as I have said, your text is quite interesting but I think you should cite another text, as a scientific research, to improve your text, ok?! I’m so sorry doing this so late … I had some problems.

See you soon,
Lindiane ;)

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