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Subject: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
Jessica (A Sestina)
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Date Posted: 09:19:45 11/27/07 Tue


The last morning in Costa Rica, and the tropical
sun has no more mercy than the one that terrorizes the desert.
We’re solemn, avoiding goodbye
with small talk, as with friends with cancer,
slowly freezing the local humidity into your native snow.
Watching you leave, my lips are frozen from your kisses.

There was fire in that first kiss.
Among the ochres and pinks and semi-tropics
of my Charleston home, you caught me under a pink snow
of petals falling in waves and drifts in the desert-
orange light of evening, and where your lips pressed, a cancer
of longing grew in me, and when the time came I said goodbye

to my beaches. Goodbye
to the salty air and humid nights that kiss
the skin and the hot, black sky where the constellation of Cancer
is illuminated in jewels. But among the palmettos and tropical
spices dwelt the sense that the sea is a desert,
and at the peak of the waves of heat, limpid and sweaty, I was wishing for snow.

And you offered me snow.
For purification, I thought, to become again pristine, and bye-the-bye
I was scoured by your rough arctic winds, and came to understand the tundra is also a desert
and the bite of frost is the only kiss
the Aurora Borealis have for me. The tropic
of my southern heart only festers cancer-like

next to your icicle calm. I am a cancer
of hurricanes screaming with the voice of angry seas, but never disrupting the drifts of your snow.
And here I am, raging and freezing, in the wrong hemisphere, lost in your Tropic
of Capricorn, my lips primed to form “Good-bye”.
But the next kiss is a warmer kiss….
Maybe under the surface, the ocean is teeming with life? The desert

boasts a few flowers… The most deserted
wasteland holds tiny sparks of life maybe my Cancer
heart could nurture to thrive. With another kiss
you promised to take me out of the winter, the ice, the snow,
And the northlands flew under us quickly and painlessly, too frigid to whisper goodbye.
But though the air is lurid and lush, the core of us is still frozen. There is no heat in this tropic.

So no more kisses, no more looking for life in the desert. You did not melt in my Tropic of Cancer, and I was frozen in your Capricorn July snow. All my kisses were poems, and all your kisses were kisses goodbye.

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[> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
andy
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Date Posted: 06:59:38 11/30/07 Fri



What a beautiful poem filled with vivid
expression that closes perfectly.

I need to check in here more myself.

thanks,
andy

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[> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
Jess
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Date Posted: 07:20:23 11/30/07 Fri

Thanks Andy.

I have a few edits in mind...I struggled a little with the constraints of a sestina and I fear I lost a little clarity, but thanks for reading.

;)

Jessica

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[> [> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
andy
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Date Posted: 15:05:00 11/30/07 Fri

Jess,

Surely I appreciate you view but, keep in mind
the best of poets shy away from sestinas.

I was just thrilled to see you attempt one
and pull it off in a worthy manner.

Edit, sure, why not so long as it calls you back.

You're a gift to the motel.

So thanks for your presence.

best,
andy

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[> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
Sasha
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Date Posted: 22:30:28 12/07/07 Fri


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And you offered me snow.
For purification, I thought, to become again pristine, and bye-the-bye
I was scoured by your rough arctic winds, and came to understand the tundra is also a desert
and the bite of frost is the only kiss
the Aurora Borealis have for me.
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~ *sighhh* now THAT is gorgeous!!!

I've written one Sestina, and don't think I'll be doing another one, as I found the form just a little too limiting for me...but I was glad I got 1 written, just to say I've done one..lol. This poem may not be completely true to how I understand the form to be, but it is just such a beautiful piece of poetry, I absolutely love your poetic voice, my friend, and we are blessed to have you here...

loving this lots!!!

*hugs*

Sash xx


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[> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
Max Hardy
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Date Posted: 16:18:48 12/10/07 Mon

Hello Jessica

First, the tale, wrought through the passage of a love tropics apart, tugged my heart as I read, and left me hollow, and wanting so much more for her.

Second, the form, i'm just learning of, and am lapping in your construct in lessons of understanding, for me though, the tale and the form so well matched.

Thank you for the teaching.

Max

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[> Subject: Re: Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn


Author:
Jessica
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Date Posted: 16:49:55 12/10/07 Mon

Oh, it's me, my dear. Absolutely my story, with strikingly few poetical licenses. The form I don't have perfectly, but I'm glad to introduce you to it. I'd love to see your construct!
Thanks for the praise,
Jess

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