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Date Posted: 02:57:49 06/23/02 Sun
Author: shizuka
Subject: §Æ±æ¤uµ{

Honse,

Ãþ has always been a very nice character, but sometimes I feel that he's too nice and cares too much about others' feelings and thus neglects his own ©¯ºÖ. So I hope that when u write yr 3rd story, §Æ±æ¤uµ{, you can make him a little more "agressive" and I guess "selfish." ( I think I used the wrong adjectives, but I hope u understand what I'm trying to say.)

Also, I was reading others' comments, and one mentioned that u have too many ¿Ë¼ö scenes in this story. Personally, I really like those scenes, they give a little more sparks to the story, and since u don't make it too ÅS°©, I think they are really great... they are so sweet and they warm one's heart.

However, there is one thing I don't like about the scene where the guy gave the girl a room key and a telephone card, asking her to choose. The way the guy talked at that part was really weird. I know he is being respectful, but it sounded as if he doesn't really care, and he talked sort of business like. I would imagine that if a boy wants to have sex with his girlfriend, he would be a little sweeter.
I'm so not articulate, can't really express what I truly feel....

Anyway, keep up with yr good work.

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