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Subject: Re: A poem: The Suicide Of God

Author:
preston

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Date Posted: 18:39:54 04/09/02 Tue
In reply to: George the Porge 's message, "Re: A poem: The Suicide Of God" on 17:19:38 04/09/02 Tue

hate me or worship me, it's the same thing to me! (feed my emotions!)
I'm glad you liked you (thanks for the note on loki)
and yes, that was the effect i was going for at the end. That i don't think very many people would actually CARE that god had offed himself. i admit, it was probably cut a wee bit short. i probably need to work on that! hehehe.

anyway, that's my ecuadorian penny reply to your two cents.
phro the bag

>I don't want to hate you 'cause you're ugly... I'd
>rather worship your small penis.
>
>Poem: I dig it whole-heartedly... especially the line
>about the raincloud countenance. And the description
>of "salty red doors." I'm all for that.
>
>Revisions I'd make:
>Capitalize Loki (heh.. not really revision, but yeah,
>you know)
>The last line bothers me. It's just the rest of the
>poem is so fantastic and then it kind of slams shut
>like a door. "God is dead..." I like (Say, ever seen
>that Kids in the Hall skit "God is dead... and he's
>really very small" Good stuff, that) but the very last
>line just seems kind of ordinary/trivial. This might
>be what you're going for... but I like the stately
>grace created in the first part of the poem.
>
>Anyways, my two cents.

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