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Date Posted: 04:36:03 October 17 2003, Friday
Author: Albert
Subject: Suggested lyrics

You must not have particularly good hearing. I was able to tell what they were after only once or twice.

Do you recall what you said to me
The evening we had our first dance
Your innocent taunt with surrender
Your soul to a true love romance
Oh but now the night is over
The little girl is older
You wake up in the morning to a cloudy day

Do you still remember
The feeling that September
Oh the passion of our hearts
Sun that chases all the clouds away

Feeling the touch of your body
Take me down right where I stand
Tempting my heart with your fire
I lead from the palm of your hand
Oh the smile is so inviting
Got lost in all the fighting
We bankrupted our hearts with all the bills we pay

What is it with the weather
That changes skin to leather
Oh the passion of our hearts
Sun that chases all the clouds away

I want you to come on and chase me some clouds away
I'd like to feel the sun come back
Back to shine upon me

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[> Correction -- Albert, 13:41:26 October 17 2003, Friday

>Tempting my heart with your fire
>I lead from the palm of your hand

Upon further thought, I think it's more likely "I'll eat from the palm of your hand". It makes more sense, contextually, and still sounds like it's probably what he's saying.

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[> [> Re: Correction -- Factitious, 14:18:32 October 17 2003, Friday

>
>>Tempting my heart with your fire
>>I lead from the palm of your hand
>
>Upon further thought, I think it's more likely "I'll
>eat from the palm of your hand". It makes more sense,
>contextually, and still sounds like it's probably what
>he's saying.

That one seems pretty plausible. But it mixes future tense in rather unpleasantly. I'd thought the idea of that section of the song was to start with present, then transition into past along with a change of mood.

It's inarguably better than "leap", so it has been incorporated into the lyrics page.

Thanks for the revisions.

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[> Re: Suggested lyrics -- yolanda, 23:22:25 October 17 2003, Friday

>You must not have particularly good hearing. I was
>able to tell what they were after only once or twice.
>
>Do you recall what you said to me
>The evening we had our first dance
>Your innocent taunt with surrender
>Your soul to a true love romance
>Oh but now the night is over
>The little girl is older
>You wake up in the morning to a cloudy day
>
>Do you still remember
>The feeling that September
>Oh the passion of our hearts
>Sun that chases all the clouds away
>
>Feeling the touch of your body
>Take me down right where I stand
>Tempting my heart with your fire
>I lead from the palm of your hand
>Oh the smile is so inviting
>Got lost in all the fighting
>We bankrupted our hearts with all the bills we pay
>
>What is it with the weather
>That changes skin to leather
>Oh the passion of our hearts
>Sun that chases all the clouds away
>
>I want you to come on and chase me some clouds away
>I'd like to feel the sun come back
>Back to shine upon me

MY GOD ALBERT that is a beautiful song where in the hell did u come up with it. it touched me SOOO much. WOW it was SOOOOOO powerful! i congratulate you on writeing this song that touches ones soul

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[> [> Re: Suggested lyrics -- Albert, 05:33:10 October 18 2003, Saturday

I didn't write it. Sinister Dexter did, I believe.

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