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Date Posted: 20:01:57 05/27/01 Sun
Author: tim
Subject: there is a dusk part 1. not so good though, its a contrast to the inner city dusk... I'll stick it up, but I think pt 2 is far better. Thanks for all the criticisms and critiques by the way, its helping lots!
In reply to: tim 's message, "more rhymey poems (forgive all these poems, nut I have a backlog of about a years writing no one has ever seen)" on 14:16:05 05/25/01 Fri


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[> to be honest, tim (although there are some good moments in these), i think you would benefit from writing without rhyme for a while. many of these rhymes are forcing you into old-fashioned grammatical structures which stop your poems from sounding natural. -- si, 20:40:53 06/05/01 Tue

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