here is a poem i wrote... its after i edited it and all (note for james and luke).... i also titled it and all. its based on that thing i wrote about the beach (i mentioned having previously written an unfinished piece about the beach in repsonse to maggie's beach thing) -- Some Let Me Make You

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Date Posted: 15:36:35 04/29/01 Sun
Author: zeina
Subject: here is a poem i wrote... its after i edited it and all (note for james and luke).... i also titled it and all. its based on that thing i wrote about the beach (i mentioned having previously written an unfinished piece about the beach in repsonse to maggie's beach thing)

Solitary Tears

While the sun set, she walked bare footed and
Bare legged, her colourless toe nails restless.
By the water, damp and grainy, broken
Crispy shells trapped salty drops of water, crispy too,
And when she left in the dark, the moon lit
Her chalky slippers and wet ankles white.

Like a dying radio the wind panted.
She wet her face and her hair whipped her, wet
Too, and wrapped tight around her neck and she pulled
The strands away, salty. When she left in
The dark, I think: I think I saw her wipe
The salty residue from her dry cheeks.

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[> Nice title. The tone is well sustained, despite 'crispy' which I don't mind now. 'she wet her face'? why? 'Salty residue' is funny, makes the narrator seem a bit of a weird sad poo. -- luke, 19:57:56 05/25/01 Fri

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