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] Date Posted: 03:41:04 02/04/08 Mon From From mud shit and bullets We so easily go To peace and love From the devil you know To god above Don’t you think I’ve had enough? God told his son Here son here’s a few nails That bit of wood they call a cross Jesus started to think May be my father been reading too many fairy tails Jesus looked up but was at a loss Father You expect them to believe this in years to come Look around you No one gives a toss Don’t you think I don’t I know son God gave Jesus those nails Get up that damn hill son For it is done From mud shit and bullets If the hat fits To seventh heaven No middle ground So you expect people not only to believe in you and me To also talk about forgiveness on their death bed Father I love you as a son You are out of your head Do me a favour when I’m dead Keep away from the communion wine Go easy on the bread Look at them Look at them all They are doing fine We can only screw things up even more Start some holy war Son Listen to your father’s voice I love you like a father should For you and me there’s no choice As for them well they do So my sweet son I feel your fear One day we can share this story over a beer Now son Take those bloody nails Get up that god damn hill For it is Done Don’t forget they may not do Son As a father I will always love you DSL [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] |
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Author: Wilopent [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 09:43:13 02/04/08 Mon There are times in our lives when nothing makes any sense, but then a day comes when EVERYTHING makes sense. It's the fruit of the tree that bears witness to our lives. I find it good to put our uneasy thoughts into poetic form, as the reader can dive in at his own risk and take from it something deeper. thank you for sharing, DSL. Hugs, Wilopent [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: darkerside of light [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 10:08:21 02/04/08 Mon Dear Wilopent First I must congrats you on being bravest of the brave to dive in and leave your thoughts and in deed they thankfully received for the record this took two days to write where normaly I take about 10 mins max. Thanking you DSL [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Wilopent [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 10:33:09 02/04/08 Mon I know, DSL. I have poems like this and everytime before I post them anywhere, I get so torn not wanting readers to judge me. And I do think there's always a fine line we teeter on between poetry and ranting and staying on the poetic side is certainly a challenge. Your write was poetry and after all, just one slice of your GREAT BIG APPLE! Hugs again, Wilopent [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Christine [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 12:26:24 02/04/08 Mon Wow! I didn't see this before...of course, I was playing elsewhere..hehehe... HOWEVER.... What is there to offend here? Isn't it something that some of us have thought at one time or another as our sons bleed and die? Poetry is sometimes like a scream, it's gotta be the loudest sometimes to be heard....kudos to you for screaming. I hear ya! ~Hugs~ [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: andy [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15:48:56 02/04/08 Mon Mark, I can see why you left the warning label but you know poetry is life. It is meant for pushing the edge if you want to. That's really what i love best about your voice. It's so fearless and free. It doesn't matter whether I agree with you on any given subject. What matters is that you make me visit it and think about it differently for a bit. Don't ever stop pushing the pen past the point of safe. I applaud you! thanks, andy [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Paul [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 17:41:30 02/04/08 Mon Mark, As I told you on the phone, this is a terrific write. I don't buy into religion of any form as you know, and this so speaks to me of what I believe, I shall say no more lest I cause some offence! LOL. Excellent my fearless friend! Peace and hope, Paul [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Sasha [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 20:16:36 02/04/08 Mon Quote: ____________________________ From mud shit and bullets We so easily go To peace and love From the devil you know To god above Don’t you think I’ve had enough? ____________________________ ~ this is a strong opening, capturing well the contrasts of life the bit that impresses me is that you spent a good deal of time on this piece making sure your words were spilled with the passion, and THAT shows growth and that is really cool, my friend...well done, Mark... *hugs* Sash xx  . [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: darkerside of light [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 02:57:32 02/05/08 Tue Dear Wilopent,Sash, Andy,Paul and Christine I thank you all As a rule I like to leave my words for others to decide what they mean Today I will offer up my own synopsis and thoughts I'd try to put my self in Jesuses shoes I stand to be corrected he was in his thirties at the time so be it's god's son he was a fully grown man very capable to looking after him self when one day he fnds out he will be betrayed and crucified. No body in their right mind could handle that and you would come with every reason to save your own skin. "Look at them Look at them all They are doing fine We can only screw things up" Then we move on to that father son relationship that exists all over the world The father who thinks he know's best and the son who knows better!and questions his fathers commands and action and authority and takes a swipe at his father in the process. "May be my fathers been reading too many fairy tales" "You expect them to believe this in years to come Look around you No one gives a toss" "You expect people not only to believe in you and me To also talk about forgiveness on their death bed" By now Jesus or the son has become angry and some what desperate to I can't believe I'm having this conversation Now also thinking that Jesus is yet to go back and tell his followers and do this my body and this my blood speach Jesus or son will make sure he hurts or throws some kind of insult in the face of the God/Father "You are out of your head Do me a favour when I'm dead Keep away from the communion wine Go easy on the bread" This is an insult slap in the face a bit like saying dad you are now the last person I ever want to see and we are finished. I could go on for ever So I'll try to rap up it up with a few reli points I'm now in gods shoes Does he want to kill his own son....NO And he knows he has no choice if wishes to give man any hope. "Listen to your fathers voice I love you like a father should For you and me there 's no choice" But God has given us the option to believe or not "As for them they do" And finally god can take no more like any father who is trying to get his son to do something they would rather not He snaps. "Take those bloody nails Get up that god damn hill For it is Done" Jesus then turns and walks away(as many a son has from his father. Now we think about christianity now those against and those for God then says to his son like a father would say to his son some thing like your the best better than the rest (How many times my own father said that to me) "Don't forget son they may not do Son As a father I will always love you" And now here's the punch line God the father God the son God the holy spirit God the three in one God had to come down on this earth in human form That man was called Jesus So the whole time god was talking and fighting himself DSL " [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Max Hardy [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 04:48:33 02/05/08 Tue Hello DSL My friend, the depths of your pondering speak loudly, with a sons voice, with a fathers voice, with the voice being both with for me, not an offensive word uttered. An aptly put, wonderfully crafted voice that paints questions and makes minds think, and for me that's one of the things I love about poetry, and your words just brim with what I love.... Never ever stop doing what you do. Max [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |