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Date Posted: 03:46:54 11/17/00 Fri
Author: Dimon
Subject: worn : near finished but need critique

tear this apart, please..want to glean something good from it. thank you :)

Morning martyr
burning for the masses
Third passing blink
sightless, sleepless,
orphan, rest
stay your passage!

Below the table
sanctuary
this triangle of friends
and I,
timeless seams
gently bind
shifting, shapeless form betray
cringe from creamy coming
Biting, blinding, hateful lay
stave your vows,
open your veins
douse your glory
bleed away...



bleed away.

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