Your Magnificance: I liked it the rhyming throughout most of it works really well which is quite an acomplishment. I'm not sure about the green day or is that meant to be about the jealousy becasue then is that cliched. Tissue also seems to be a bit out not becasue of the rhyming just the actual word. I like the last line, although mow i think about it the fact that it is Your Magnificance for some reason makes it sound like mocking some royalty or an animal, maybe thats just me. -- Some Let Me Make You

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Date Posted: 14:38:54 05/27/01 Sun
Author: maggie
Subject: Your Magnificance: I liked it the rhyming throughout most of it works really well which is quite an acomplishment. I'm not sure about the green day or is that meant to be about the jealousy becasue then is that cliched. Tissue also seems to be a bit out not becasue of the rhyming just the actual word. I like the last line, although mow i think about it the fact that it is Your Magnificance for some reason makes it sound like mocking some royalty or an animal, maybe thats just me.
In reply to: tim 's message, "more rhymey poems (forgive all these poems, nut I have a backlog of about a years writing no one has ever seen)" on 14:16:05 05/25/01 Fri

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[> Dusk pt 2: yep i liked this too. You seem to have got everything into those few lines. What was the pt 2 for out of cuirosity? (please excuse the spelling). Nothing else to say, perfect! -- meg, 14:42:17 05/27/01 Sun

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