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Subject: Re: 3 in 1 Short Form Challenge

Author:
Jess

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Date Posted: 11:57:16 12/20/07 Thu
In reply to: Sasha 's message, "3 in 1 Short Form Challenge" on 18:58:11 12/07/07 Fri

End of the begining by =Omardxb on deviant ART

I traffic in desertion.
In endless shading of umber-
Shadow plays with no
participants but me,
no stage, no curtain, no love.

Thirsty for words, my throat
thatched with promises I've broken,
dragging chains with half-hearted teeth
marks, my heart smudged, sullied.

I'm cobbling my excuses, the
only participant, the
waste, simile for my soul. "

I always have such a hard time with the syllable restrictions....my submission is sub-par, but on the plus, I got to reread the oeuvre that came before me! Lovely, ladies!
Jess

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[> Subject: Re: 3 in 1 Short Form Challenge

Author:
Sasha
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Date Posted: 14:46:11 12/22/07 Sat

~ Jess, hon, you are wonderful for even trying this challenge

I didn't realize until I did it myself how hard this one was

but hey, we all challenged ourselves to the max with this one..lol

we can all be proud to get through it...

and syllable count or not, your poem rocks!!!

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Thirsty for words, my throat
thatched with promises I've broken,
dragging chains with half-hearted teeth
marks, my heart smudged, sullied.
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I love that!!!!

thanks for joining in, sweet one

*hugs*

Sash xx

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