VoyForums
[ Show ]
Support VoyForums
[ Shrink ]
VoyForums Announcement: Programming and providing support for this service has been a labor of love since 1997. We are one of the few services online who values our users' privacy, and have never sold your information. We have even fought hard to defend your privacy in legal cases; however, we've done it with almost no financial support -- paying out of pocket to continue providing the service. Due to the issues imposed on us by advertisers, we also stopped hosting most ads on the forums many years ago. We hope you appreciate our efforts.

Show your support by donating any amount. (Note: We are still technically a for-profit company, so your contribution is not tax-deductible.) PayPal Acct: Feedback:

Donate to VoyForums (PayPal):

Login ] [ Main index ] [ Post a new message ] [ Search | Check update time ]


[ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]

Date Posted: 18:20:00 08/21/01 Tue
Author: luke
Subject: It's possible you didn't intend it but the partial rhyme in the second and third lines makes them sound more relaxed than the corresponding lines in the last stanza. It works
In reply to: james 's message, "Bear with me its the best i could do in the meantime" on 22:46:00 08/15/01 Wed


[ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]


Replies:

[> in years to come this will be one of those poems you wish violently you hadn't written...:) hand on my heart, james, i know perfectly well that you are entirely capable of writing good poetry, and if you are going through a dry patch with the prose, don't worry, it happens to us all - i once went two and a half years without writing a word, and convinced myself it was lost for good. it never is. this, though, is, er, not good - go back to writing prose...:) -- si, 00:42:13 09/03/01 Mon

[ Post a Reply to This Message ]
[ Edit | View ]



Post a message:
This forum requires an account to post.
[ Create Account ]
[ Login ]

Forum timezone: GMT+0
VF Version: 3.00b, ConfDB:
Before posting please read our privacy policy.
VoyForums(tm) is a Free Service from Voyager Info-Systems.
Copyright © 1998-2019 Voyager Info-Systems. All Rights Reserved.