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Date Posted: 18:44:47 08/21/01 Tue
Author: luke
Subject: This is actually really funny particularly the beginning and there isn't anything that annoys me when I read it which is extremely unusual especially for such a long piece. I'm impressed. 'Quick paces' and 'mister officer' would be my favourite bits.
In reply to: zeina 's message, "a little story. zeina goes back to prose for a bit. sorry its so damn long." on 05:53:08 08/19/01 Sun


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[> this is a very effective piece. it needs some polishing (i could say where precisely if you wanted), but the somewhat detached feeling of possibilities failing to materialise is presented very evocatively. some grammar/punctuation points, but overall very well controlled. it would work as a filler in a collection of short stories. i doubt you could produce a whole bookful like that, though - it would wear thin after a while. -- si, 00:37:57 09/03/01 Mon

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